Kevin Jobes Persuasive speech writing

WALT : we are learning to write a persuasive speech 

 Pets should deserve the same the same care as humans 

Mistreated sometimes. (not loved)

deserve To be LOVED.

Love pets like children .

Always care about the pets that you have all the time . 

1. BULA my name is Kevin Jobe  and I have a dog Izzy and Izzy is a Labrador and sometimes she is not treated well so we make sure she is treated the right way.

                                                                    

2. I think that all Pets should deserve the same care as humans. Because some pets are not treated well at all, pets need to be treated well and LOVED properly. All pets are lovable fish cat dog doesn't matter what kind of pet you have, all of them deserve to have the best treatment. 

3. Some pets are lucky to have a home most pets are tied up allll day, but if you were a pet and  you treated well how would you feel  always happy aye but what if you were being hit for coming inside all muddy looking 

4. or if you were playing too rough and got a graling that sure would feel sad wouldn’t it, well you are lucky your not a pet because that's what pets have to go through!! i bet you it is really hard for pets this way 

5. and this is why we need to start thinking about the pets that we own and start to care about pets a little bit more step by step, imagine if you were locked up all day all night and you were always treated the worst way that would be absolutely TERRIBLE wouldn’t it! 

6. These are all the things that  pets need to be energised ,obviously pets need a home to start also food water exercise and way more things you name it but that is all i'm gonna say for now all of you when you get home if do have pets  care about them let have there free time let them drink all there water and let them Munch all there food. 

7. All pets are beautiful  creatures and all should be able to live instead of being killed I've loved my dog Izzy since the day we bought her when she was a tinsy tiny puppy  well technically she still is a puppy but she is much more bigger now she is huge  twice a day we feed Izzy so she is energised  i think that this is the end of my speech. 

this is my reflection so while i was writing my speech i was just thinking about what pets should get thinking in my little brain trying to come up with things to put into my speech were just poping into my head tik tok tik tok i have a speech about pets 

Question   

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